czy to zdanie ma sens?

I am writing to you to express my total dissatisfaction with the mobile phone your shop provided me with.

MA

I don't know

chodzi mi o to czy jest dobrze

ma ale dziwnie brzmi chociaz gramatycznie jest poprawne lepiej bedzie strong dissatisfaction i the mobile shop I have bought in your shop

i wystarczy I am writing to express

Dzięki wielkie

Muszę napisać list z reklamacją,że niby popsuł mi sie telefon. Czy może mi to ktoś sprawdzić i poprawić ewentualne błędy? Będę dozgonnie wdzięczna.Napiszę tylko ten fragment co do którego mam wątpliowści. The mobile phone I bought in Chicago (the shop in the Plaza shopping center) a three weeks ago. I choose the N12 model,shop assistant told me, that it was the best available model. The phone worked perfectly well for the first two days. But on the third day something happened. When the battery ran down the phone turned off,I cannot turn it on. The screen went blank.I tried to recharge the battery, but it didn't work. So I decided to borrow another battery from my sister. We replaced them, but again nothing happened. As a result I was left without phone.

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Wg mnie dobrze ale niech ktoś jeszcze sprawdzi.