czy ktos umie bardzo dobrze angielski?

i jesli tak to czy moze sprawdzic ten tekst, czy jest poprawnie gramatycznie. Jest to jedna strona z eseju, wiec tak jakby wyrwane z kontekstu. Chodzmi mi tylko o to zeby ktos ocenil gramatyke Our project has a lot of strong things. Firstly and the most important is the unique and original technology on the boat. No one used 3D technology and QR code on the boat before us. In the future people won't only relax on the boat, they will have the chance to see amazing shows. It will be about one of the H.C Andersens story. Actually we has chosen 'Little Mermaid'. Visitors will see 3D images, hear the original version of the story. Our idea will be use for the first time in the history of technology. Our ideas are unique because it will be for everyone, children and adults will be delighted, nobody will be feeling bored, or dissatisfied. Our advantage is also the fact that no one will see it online. Because the most beautiful effect will be on live. 3D effects, story, QR codes, and contact with nature will give a new experience, and unforgettable moments. But like every product/company, our project have also weaknesses. Most of all, our ideas are really expensive, we had contact with 'We Create Magic' team of professionals, who informed us about the price. Turned out that 3D installation on the boat will be really expensive. Our plan will be cost 650-800.000dkr. We are thinking that it will be too much for families, who make money only half year. The second problem is working time. In interview with Morten Skytte Olesen, owner of Odense Aafart, we got information that they cannot change their working schedule. They are always working at the same time. They do not work evening, but you can only see the 3D at night time or in a dark environment. Another problem is ticket price as it increases. Today you can buy one ticket for 80dkr, but in the future, with a new technology, it will be much more expensive. The company will pay a lot money for new installation, if they won't be bankrupt, they will have to raise the price of tickets as well. Odense Aafart will need more workers, what affects bad on business. New workers, new salaries. Fortunately our project has a lot of opportunities. Firstly, and the most important, is fact that if the company will use our ideas, then they will increase the number of visitors. Odense Aafart will be first place where people can relax on the boat, and admire beautiful images on the water. Media will be really interesting, they will speak and advertise about Odense Aafart all the time, as well media will make this place popular and an attraction centre. Everyone of tourist will want to see this magic place. Local people will be interested also. A large number of visitors will improve company earnings. But we have to remember about threats. We worry that the new technology will be too expensive, for the company, it is old family business, they are working really hard all the time, but they earn money only 6 months in year. We are thinking that, it is not enough for such a big step in the future. People love new technology, but usually high prices deter them. That is why we are afraid, that new price of tickets will be too high for people. Media are really good in means of communication, but they have also cons. When Media will spread the tidings about Odense Aafart, some company can steal our ideas. Then Odense Aafart will have big competition rising.

ja umiem ale za cholerę mi się tego czytać nie chce

błędy stylistyczne i źle użyte kobnstrukcje, kaszana

Przeczytalam kilka zdan z tych 3 akapitow. Nie pisze tego zlosliwie, ale rzeczywiscie kaszana z twoim angielskim.

dobra rada - nie wysylaj tego nigdzie, jesli chcesz zeby potraktowano cie powaznie

Our project has a lot of strong POINTS. First and the most important is the unique and original technology USES on the boat. No one HAS EVER used 3D technology and QR code on the boat before . In the future people WILL NOT only relax on the boat, they WILL ALSO have the chance to see amazing shows. It will be about one of the H.C Andersens story. Actually we has chosen 'Little Mermaid'. Visitors will see 3D images, hear the original version of the story. Our idea will be USED for the first time in the history of THE technology. Our ideas are unique because it will be for everyone, both, children and adults will be delighted, nobody will be feeling bored, or dissatisfied. Our advantage is also the fact that no one will be able to see it online. The most POWERFUL effect will be based on live 3D effects, story, QR codes, and the contact with nature. It will give a totaly new experience, and unforgettable moments. But like every product/company, our project has also weaknesses. Most of all, our ideas are really expensive, we had had contact with 'We Create Magic' team of professionals, who informed us about the price. It has turned out that 3D installation on the boat will be really expensive. We are expecting the cost of 650-800.000dkr. We believe that it may be too much for families, who make money only per half a year. The second problem is working time. In interview with Morten Skytte Olesen, the owner of Odense Aafart, we got an information that they cannot change their working schedule. They are always working at the same time. They do not work evening, but you can only view the 3D at night time or in a dark environment. Another problem is ticket price as it increases. Today you can buy one ticket for 80dkr, but in the future, with a new technology, it will be much more expensive. The company will pay a lot money for new installation, if they don't go bankrupt, they will have to raise the price of tickets as well. Odense Aafart will need more workers, what affects business badly. New workers means new salaries. Fortunately our project has a lot of opportunities. Firstly, and the most important, is the fact that if the company will use our ideas, then they will increase the number of visitors. Odense Aafart will be the first place where people can relax on the boat, and admire beautiful images on the water. The media will be really interested, they will speak and advertise Odense Aafart all the time, as well the media will make this place popular and an attraction centre. Every tourist will want to see this magic place. Local people will be interested also. A large number of visitors will improve company's earnings. But we have to remember about threats. We worry that the new technology will be too expensive, for the company, it is an old family business, they are working really hard all the time, but they earn money only 6 months a year. We are belive that, it is not enough for such a big step into the future. People love new technology, but usually high prices deter them. That is why we are afraid, that the new price of tickets will be too high for some of the people. Media are really good in means of communication, but they have also cons. When the Media will spread the tidings about Odense Aafart, some company can steal our ideas. Then Odense Aafart will have big competition rising.

pewnie coś przeoczyłam ale zrobiłam tyle ile dostrzegłam może ktoś jeszcze doszlifuje i poprawi

Our project has a lot of strong POINTS. First and the most important is the unique and original technology USED on the boat

dziekuje bardzo, mam nadzieje ze cos z tego bedzie :)