problem z ANGIELSKIM, czy moze ktos mi pomoc????

chodzi o to zeby przeczytac tylko ten tekst ktory napisalam, i jesli ktos z was zauwazy jakis blad, to prosilabym zeby mi to napisac, to bardzo wazne dla mnie, i z gory dziekuje za wszelka pomoc!!! :) We all know how important technology is, and how it has changed our lives. Technology has developed so quickly during last years. Smart phones are now capable of acting as standalone computer devices that can take pictures, search the Internet, send emails, text messages and others important stuff for us. While it might seem that the technology of today has reached its limits, it is still actually spreading its proverbial wings, and to think that 20 years ago our phones were used solely for making a call But back to our evolving technology, we as students would like to make the technology even more robust. We decided to create perfect application for android, which will change patients lives. We know how important time and money are, so improving the care of our patients, we are created something what will save these two values. The development of applications: We picked up with our idea, after desk / filed research and internet survey. We asked around 300 different people what they would like to change in Odense University Hospital, and what they think about our ideas. They were great help, because after research we improved our ideas, and we made one big plan, how our app will look like. After wasting paper sheets, we drew a detailed plan, and we moved it into Photoshop. (photo) Firstly, we made Use case diagram, which is a representation of a user's interaction with the system and depicting the specifications of a use case. Those diagrams are based upon functionality, and we focused on what patients will see. (photo) How you can see, we have focused on simple action of our application. It is because we have to remember about our Target group. We got an e-mail from Per Henriksen (consultant of Aarhus University Hospital) where he wrote us about the most common age of patients. The greatest numbers of them are seniors, so our app has to be easy to use and friendly for everyone. (photo) After that, we made an activity diagram, where we presented operational step by step workflows of components in a system. Here we focused on how our app will work: (photo)

tam gdzie w nawiasie jest photo, to mam dodane zdjecie do raportu

nie jest zle, bym zmienil cos tam ze stylistycznych spraw, ale no moze byc

le, czlowieku, nie umiesz angielskiego to nic po angielsku nie pisz jak nie umiesz, a nie sie pytasz ludzi czy bledy widza!!!! bardoz duzo bedlow, nic sie kupy nie trzyma!! wstyd publikowac gdziekolwiek

nie wydaje mi sie zeby tyle bledow bylo jak piszesz, ale spoko... byloby milo jakbys mi napisala z czym robie blad, bo sama krytyka mi nie pomoze za duzo..

...Thanks to this diagram, we know what exactly we will need for our app, and how it will work. Now I will explain you every single function of our application. Lets start from beginning. Main page is really important, it is place where patients have to login, to get on next page. For patients it will be really easy, because all what they have to do, is select their own Cpr Number, and click login In technical site, it will be a little bit more complicated. After when patients will enter Their own Cpr Number, it will go to database. Patients will be able to read about Odense University Hospital, and use app tutorial, before login. In technical site, patients will be redirected to other sides by buttons. Tutaj jest kontynuacja tego tekstu

ja rozumiem, a jestem w klasie maturalnej wiec chyba nie jest zle, ale nie chce cie poprawiac bo sama nie napisalabym lepiej

moze nauczycielka ci tu jakas pomoze, poczekaj do wieczora

no prosze....

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