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Dear Mr Faraday, I am writing with reference the article entitled 'It's a student's life' which appeared last Friday in your magazine. On behalf of students, I would like to express disagreement with the views contained in the article. First of all, it is not true that all students live off other people's money and do not know the meaning of the word 'work'. In fact, a significant percentage of young students, everyday try to propitate attending the lectures with hard work to create opportunity to extend knowledge. In this way, they contribute a voluable example to society- 'the secret of success is constancy to purpose'. Secondly, we find it difficult to believe that today's students are lazy and unproductive individuals. This is certainlynot the case in my region where majority of learners have complaints about avast number of responsibilities. As far as possible, they go to university, write essays, work and carry out household chores, simultaneously (jednocześnie).Furthermore, when they leave school and enter the real world, they realise what work, stress, devotion and sleepless nights mean. To conclude, we found your article to be extremely subjective. We look forward to reading more objective reports in the future. Yours sincerely, xyz

To dla mnie bardzo ważne, gdyż ocena z tej pracy, przeważy na ocenie końcowej z praktycznej nauki języka. Pisałam ta pracę sama, bez żadnych pomocy, dlatego liczę się z tym, że mogą pojawić się błędy. Jeżeli znajdzie się ktoś, kto ma chwilę czasu żeby przeczytać i zna język na tyle dobrze żeby wnieść poprawki albo zasugerować pewne zmiany, będę niezmiernie wdzięczna.

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