Proszę o pomoc-SPRAWDZENIE j.ang.-LIST FORMALNY

Temat zadania: Chcesz założyć klub osiedlowy dla młodzieży, do czego jest potrzebne wsparcie finansowe zagranicznej firmy mającej swoją siedzibę w twojej dzielnicy. Napisz do tej firmy list, w którym zawrzesz następujące informacje: -określisz, o co prosisz, - przedstawisz swoje dotychczasowe doświadczenie w działalności społecznej' - podasz powody, dla których taki klub jest potrzebny w twojej okolicy' - zasugerujesz, jak na takim klubie firma mogłaby skorzystać. Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to present my plans connected with founding to sport juvenile club in our quarter and ask your company for a financial support which is necessary to realize my plan. I have worked as volunteer in a summer camp. I have helped in organize to camps, camps fires and partes. The present young people who live here do not have to much to do. As a result crime and vandalism are very popular here. Thanks to the club we will be able to reduce this. We can show teenagers how to organize and spend their free time. Your company could to promote yours products through printed designers on the t-shirts for examply. I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully. X Proszę o sprawdzenie i pomoc, nie cierpię, kompletnie nie umiem pisać listów :( Większość moich prac wygląda jak spod translatora :( help :)

nikt nie pomoże?:(

nikt nie pomoże?:(

?:(

duzo spelowek narobilas i sa bledy gramatyczne

spelówek? o mój boże, co za wieś :D

Co to są spelówki?:) I gdzie te błędy gramatyczne, na czym polegają? Nie potrafię wyłuskać takich rzeczy :(

as a volunteer

O, dziękuję :) A czasy są w porządku?

on the summer camp

W paru zdaniach powinnas uzyc Past Simple zamiast Present Perfect

Jezeli pracowalas jako wolontariusz (pracowalas w przeszlosci i ta czynnosc jest skonczona powinnas uzyc Past Simple- I worked as a...) Present Perect uzywamy gdy mowimy o czynnosci, ktora wydarzyla sie w niedalekiej przeszlosci z konsekwencjami w danym momencie. Nie wiem czy wystarczajaco jasno Ci to wytlumaczylam:)

Thanks to the club we will be able to reduce this Mysle, ze lepiej: The club will be able to reduce this problems.

Wydaje mi sie, ze pierwsze zdanie nie brzmi najlepiej. Ja absolutnie nie chce Cie krytykowac. Sama nie jestem swietna z angielskiego, ale staram sie Ci pomoc:)

Dzięki wielkie :)

Pierwsze zdanie mam według wzoru dla listów formalnych, ale rozłożę to na dwa :)

Czy tak będzie poprawnie? Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to present my plans connected with founding to sport juvenile club in our quarter. Would it be possilble for your company to reasure financial to realize my plan? I worked as s volunteer on the summer camp. I helped in organise to camps and camps fires. Together with my friends we organised to extramural activities for children on the our clubroom. The present young people who live here do not have to much to do. As a result crime and vandalism are very popular here. The club will be able to reduce this problems. We can to show to teenagers how to organize and spend their free time. Your company could to promote yours products, for example, through printed designers on the t-shirts or on the shorts. I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully. X

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to present my plans of founding a juvenile sport club in our quarter. Would it be possilble for your company to financially support and realize my plan? I worked as a volunteer in a summer camp. I helped in organising camps and bonfires. Together with my friends we organised some extramural activities for children in our clubroom. Young people who live here do not have too much to do. As a result, crime and vandalism are very popular here. The club will help in reducing this problems. We can show the teenagers how to organize their free time. Your company could promote your products, for example, through printed designers on the t-shirts or on the shorts. I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully. X

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to present my plans of founding a juvenile sport club in our quarter. Therefore I would like to ask your company for a financial support, which is necessary to realize my plans. I worked as a volunteer in a summer camp. I helped with organising camps and bonfires. Together with my friends we organised some extramural activities for children in our clubroom. Young people who live here do not have too much to do. As a result, crime and vandalism are very popular here. The club will help with reducing this problem. We can show teenagers how to organize their free time. Your company could promote your products, for example, through printed designers on T-shirts or on the shorts. I hope to hear from you soon. Yours faithfully. X