hej, ang czy moglby ktos rzucic okiem?

Witam, czy moglbys ktos przejrzec ten tekst aby zobaczyc czy ogólnie jest ok i czy mozna taką pracę oddać do sprawdzenia? dzieki z góry pozdrawiam GFV, a pharmaceutical company had a dramatic fluctuations over the last two years. At the beginning of the first year, shares dropped of 5p because of the profit warnings and the resignation of CEO Wilfred OLeary. Later on, the new boss Cheri Carbone (38),a keen tennis player, changed this situation. Carbone, an Italian American and the ex-head of research at JKL Chemicals caused that the shares recovered slightly. Companys new anti-ageing cream shares gradually rose (they leapt to 25 p). Unfortunately, poor publicity as a result of animals rights protests at the GFV laboratories in Hertfordshire led to a significant collapse in shares. In the next year, when CEO Cheri Carbone announced takeover of HTY a cutting-edge biotechnology company, the shares picked up strongly from 10p to almost 35p. The market reacted badly to news of the scary over allergic reaction to anti-ageing cream and the shares plummeted to almost 12p. Towards the end of the year, after announcing complete recall and running TV commercial, the shares considerably jumped and it restored the confidence in GFV. Their new JKL tanning pill has recently brought a strong surge of market interest and the shares strengthen again.

ponawiam:)

;p

"Carbone, an Italian American and the ex-head of research at JKL Chemicals caused that the shares recovered slightly" Mi to "caused that" nie pasuje, nie. Może "contributed to slight recovery of shares"?

Jeszcze to "The market reacted badly to news of the scary over allergic reaction". A tutaj lepiej "of the threat of" zamiast "scary over".

aha o widzsz nawet bym nie wiedziala ze nie pasuje:) ale dzieki bardzo za poprawe;) chodzi mi tak ogolnie czy to ma jakis sens i laczy sie ze soba..

Reszta może być.

ok dziekujeę bardzo ;*

Myślę, że jest ok, ja bym oddała.

Nie ma za co. Powodzenia :)

Miłego dnia:)